2020年高考全国1卷英语作文赏析

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20xx高考全国1卷

假定你是李华，正在教你的英国朋友Leslie学习汉语。请你写封邮件告知下次上课的计划。内容包括：

(1)时间和地点;

(2)内容：学习唐诗;

(3)课前准备：简要了解唐朝的历史。

注意：

1.词数100左右;

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

学生实例1

分数：23.5广东湛江一中

DearIeslie,

Asscheduled,wewillhaveaChineselessonnextweekend.Consideringourstudentsarepreparingfortheirfinalexam,Isuggestwehavethelessonintheparknearourschool.

ThemainlycourseofourclassistolearnthepoemofTangDynasty.It'suniversallyacknowledgedthatthepoemofTangDynastyisoneofthesolidfoundationsofourculture.Alargenumberoftalentpoetsshowedtheirviewaboutthesocietyandexpressedtheirsatisfactionwiththebeautyofourmotherland.Youcanbroadenyourhorizonandhaveabetterunderstandingofourcolorfulculturethroughthisstudy.

KnowingthehistoryofTangDynastyisbetterforyoubeforehavingclass.It'sthesocietythatcreatesthebrilliantpoem.

Yours

LiHua.

点评：本文要点覆盖较全面，文章结构清晰，语法错误较少，长短句运用合理，结合了简单句同时运用了较多的复杂句式，如主语从句It’suniversallyacknowledgedthat…，强调句型It'sthesocietythat…非谓语结构作状语Consideringourstudentsarepreparingfor…等等;同时恰当使用了一定的高级词汇如solidfoundation，broadenone’shorizons等。

建议：1文章要点方面，建议时间更精确些，比如下周周几几点到几点;2语法方面，注意细节语法的错误，比如mainly改成main，poem改成poems等。

学生实例2

分数：20河南光山二高

DearLesile

Howareyou?IhavelearntyourprogressinyourChinesewithmyhelpandyourhardwork.Iamwritingtotelltheplanthatwhatshouldyoudoinadvance.

First,let'smakeitateighto'clockinschoollibrary.Wecanconsultedanumberofbooksaboutthesubjectthere.Second,thenextthemeisaboutChinesecultureespeciallytheTangpoemsthatarefullofhistoryandact.Ibelieveyouwillbeattractiveonceyouputyourheart.ThirdIneedyoutoperparesomework.TheTangpoemsarebasedontheTangdynasty

soyoushouldtolookthroughthehistoryandgreathappening.

Asthesayinggoesnopains,nogains.Chineseissobeautifulanddifficultthatyouneedbeinvolvedsincerely.Iamlookingforwardtostartingourstudy.

Yours，

LiHua

点评：本文要点覆盖较全面，文章结构较清晰，有恰当的衔接词使用，长短句运用较合理;同时恰当使用了一定的常用句式及谚语，如asthesayinggoes，nopains，nogains等。

建议：1文章要点方面，建议时间更精确些，比如具体是哪一周哪一天的8点;2语法方面，注意细节语法的错误，如canconsulted改成canconsult等;3逻辑方面，注意词和词之间的单配逻辑，如youwillbeattractiveonceyou…逻辑上不是很通顺;4单词拼写上，注意拼写的准确性，如perpare改成prepare等。

学生实例3

分数：22日照一中

DearLeslie,

How'sitgoing?HaveyouabsorbedalltheknowledgeItaughtyoulasttime?Nowletmetellyoutheinformationofnextlesson.

IwillgivethelessononnextSaturdaymorning,from8:00a.m.to11:30a.m.at101Roomintheteachingbuildinginourschool.

WearegoingtolearnaboutTangpoetry,whichisanextremelyimportantpartofnotonlyChineselanguagebutalsoChineseculture.WhatyouneedtodoinadvanceistoknowbrieflyaboutthehistoryofTangDynasty.YoucanconsulttheInterorthebooksIgaveyou.Besides,don'tfettoreviewwhatyouhavelearnedbefore.

Iamlookingforwardtoourmeeting.Seeyounextweek!

Yours,